Should we use articles highlighted in bold in the sentence below?
A video, that not only engages but also impresses target audience with a unique story, worldwide achievements, touching revelation, and in the end, a new hope for a better future.
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A rewrite just for you:
A video that engages and impresses its target audience with a unique story, achievements around the globe, a touching revelation, and hope for a better future.
Now, it's better. Simpler is better. That is now used correctly in the sentence. Maybe /touching revelations/ with an s. But I can't say since I don't know what you are referring to.
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