Wednesday, August 16, 2017

Is a comma required here or would an "and" or "-" make more sense?




I'm writing on a reward text for a Kickstarter crowdfunding campaign.
Is it correct to set a comma in the sentence below or would an and or - make more sense in that context?




You'll get your name listed on our website, if you like along with a link to your Twitter profile.



Answer



Some people resist them, but this seems to me a fine candidate for a parenthetical. You are offering a single reward that can vary slightly in nature based on the donor's preference. I think it's simple and clear to write:





You'll get your name (and a link to your Twitter profile, if you'd like) listed on our website.




This could be made even clearer if you ditch the slightly awkward "you'll get your" construction:




We'll list your name (and a link to your Twitter profile, if you'd like) on our website.



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