I am writing a sentence like so:
"I bought the Dell laptop because not only did I find the price appealing but I also liked the the fact that the laptop had an integrated webcam."
Is my use of ".. not only .. but also ..." appropriate? Is there a better way to phrase such a sentence?
Answer
This sounds better to me:
I bought the Dell laptop not only because I found the price appealing, but also because I liked the fact that the laptop had an integrated webcam.
I just moved the 'not only' up front. This pretty much cascaded to all the other changes: not splitting up "but also," keeping the tenses more consistent ('I found' vs. 'did I find'), etc.
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